Workshop for Robert's Research Paper Step 3

Workshop for Part 3
Overall
1. What do you like best about the paper? Be specific.
Interesting information on genetically modified food. Makes you wonder what we’re eating.
2. Email the author and ask for one particular concern that s/he had about the draft. Examine that area and see if you can offer the author helpful suggestions.
Did that. Waiting for reply.
Thesis
3. Does the author clearly express his/her opinion of the topic in the thesis? What argument does the thesis make?
(A)Yes
(B)That there are potential risks with genetically modified food
4. What group of people agrees with the author? What group disagrees with the author?
(A)Everyone who eats modified food
(B)Scientist and the people who market it
5. Does the paper have an argumentative thesis statement using ALTHOUGH and BECAUSE?
Yes
Content
6. On a scale of 1 to 10, how interesting did you find this paper to read? Be brutally honest! (Friends don’t let friend turn in boring essays!)
6.5
7.Where can the author more fully develop ideas, either by providing examples or explaining/clarifying concepts for the reader? Be specific (e.g. “the 3rd is dullsville”; “the conclusion is really vague”).
Possibly some information on nutritional value on before and after modified.
8.What kinds of objections might someone who disagrees with the author’s point of view raise? If there are none, go back to #3.
The possibility of health issues, corporations with patents controlling the food supply and the quantity verses quality issue.
9.Has the author dealt with these objections?
Yes
10.Is the relationship between each paragraph and the thesis clear? If not, what suggestions do you have for the author to improve the connection?
Yes
Style
11. Are there easy transitions from one paragraph to the next, or does the author jump from topic to topic?
Seems to flow well. There are some abbreviations that I think should be spelled out.
12. Does the opening of the essay capture the reader’s attention? How so? If not, what suggestions can you make that might strengthen the opening?
(A)Yes
(B)Corn on the cob is my favorite!
13. Does the concluding paragraph serve to bring the discussion to an end that logically follows from the thesis and its direction?
Yes
Research
14. How many different sources are cited in the paper (don’t look at Works Cited; look at the parenthetical citations. The medium does not matter.)
4
15. Does the author rely heavily on just 1 or 2 sources, or does the author equally use all of the sources to support the paper’s thesis?
1 cite for each of the 4 sources
16. Does the author have more quotes in his/her paper than personal opinion?
About equal
17. Are there any sources listed on the Works Cited that are not cited within the body of the essay? (This is a no-no)
No
18. Is all the information retrieved from research, including opinion, ideas, paraphrases, quotes, and statistics, cited with in-text (parenthetical) citations? If not, list specifics of what needs to be cited (friends don’t let friends turn in plagiarized papers).
Yes
19. All quotes in research papers should be commented upon. Does the author comment after every quote? If not, help the author decide what the underlying reason behind putting the quote in the paper was.
Yes